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First, the author assumes that Green Mountain's comparatively strong job-placement record
is due to the fact that it provides more business courses and job counselors than Mira Vista,
rather than some other factor. But this need not be the case. Perhaps Green Mountain
students are exceptionally bright or resourceful to begin with. Or perhaps the quality of
instruction and job counseling at Green Mountain is exceptionally high. Moreover, perhaps
Green Mountain provides more business courses and job counselors than Mira Vista simply
because Green Mountain is a larger school with more students; if so, then the comparative
numbers are not likely to have any bearing on job-placement success. In short, without ruling
out other possible explanations for the difference between job-placement rates, the author
cannot reasonably conclude that additional business courses and job counselors would
enhance Mira Vista's job-placement record.
Another problem with the argument is that the statistics comparing job placement rates
might be distorted in one or more respects. First, the author fails to indicate the percentage of
Green Mountain graduates who find employment in their major fields of study. Without this
information it is impossible to assess the comparative success of the two colleges in helping
their recent graduates find such employment. Second, the author ignores the possibility that
the time parameters defining the two schools' job-placement rates differ. Mira Vista's record
was determined only three months after graduation. It is entirely possible that Green
Mountain's record was based on a longer period of fi_me, thereby distorting the comparative
success of the schools in helping their recent graduates find jobs.
The cited statistics about Mira Vista's job placement record might be unreliable in other
respects as well. These statistics were based only on data from Mira Vista seniors who
reported to the college's job-placement center. The author overlooks the possibility that only a
small portion of Mira Vista seniors reported to begin with. The author also ignores the
possibility that many of these reporting students later changed their minds about seeking
employment or were offered jobs but turned them down. Without ruling out these possible
scenarios, the author cannot reasonably rely on these statistics to support the claim that Mira
Vista's job-placement record is comparatively poor and thus could be improved by Mira Vista's
emulating Green Mountain.
In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must
show that additional business courses and job counselors would in fact improve Mira Vista's
job-placement rate, and that the comparison between the job-placement rates at the two
schools is fair. Finally, the author provides no evidence whatsoever to support his
recommendation for providing more computer courses; to justify this claim the author must
provide supporting evidence.
Argument 122
The following appeared as an editorial in the local newspaper of Dalton.
"When the neighboring town of Williamsville adopted a curfew four months ago that made it
illegal for persons under the age of 18 to loiter or idle in public places after 10 p.m., youth crime
in Williamsville dropped by 27 percent during curfew hours. In Williamsville's town square, the
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area where its citizens were once most outraged at the high crime rate, not a single crime has
been reported since the curfew was introduced. Therefore, to help reduce its own rising crime
rate, the town of Dalton should adopt the same kind of curfew. A curfew that keeps young
people at home late at night will surely control juvenile delinquency and protect minors from
becoming victims of crime."
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