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Therearemanyschoolviolencesineachschool.Thosearebigproblemstoourgovenmentandsocial.Schoolviolenceseffectthestudyingofstudents.Thisisveryserious,evensomestudentsarenervioustogoschool.Infact,thegovernmentmustgivestudentsacleanplacetostudy.Teachersshouldhelpstudentsknowitisadutytostudy.So,everyoneshouldfacethosebigproblems.
Doweknowwhatarestudents’ideas?Dotheeducatorstrytoknow?Mosteducatorshopethegovenmentcangivestudentsmoreandhelpthemmore.Thesearepeople’shope.Butitissounfortunatethatstudentscan’thaveagoodplacetostudy.Also,teachershavetoteachthestudents.Notthatstudentscanknowwhattostudybythemself.Inthecompus,therearemanyguyssellthedrugsandacoholtoyoungerstudents.Whythoseguyscangointotheschool?Thatisalsothemainproblem. 中华考试网(www.liuxue86。com)
Whenwewerelittle,wedidn’tknowwhatiscorrectandwhatiswrong.Soweloseourselfeasily.Atthesametime,weneedmuchcarefromparentsandteachers.Soourteachersandparentsplaytheimportantrolesandtheyownmustdobetter.Becausesomestudentslearnsomebadhabitsfromtheirteachersandparents.
Ifwewanttoresolvealltheproblems,wemustfacetheproblemsandfindoutthereasons,thentrytoresolvethem.Wealsomustcareallstudents.Ifwecanhelpthem,tringtodoourbest.Then,theproblemswillbecomelessandless.
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Thisisaseriouslyflawedresponsetothetopic.Thewriterbeginsbydiscussingschoolviolenceandtheneedforagoodplacetostudy,parentalandteacherinfluence,andresolutionofschoolproblems.Theissueofwhoshoulddeterminethecurriculum,teachersorstudents,isimpliedbutnotaddresseddirectly.Infact,teacher-directedlearningseemstobeasmallpointinaseriesofconcernsrelatedtoschoolviolence.Thedevelopmentofapositionontheissueisunfocusedanddisorganized.Eventheexample,drugselling,relatestoschoolviolenceandnottocurricularresponsibility.
Languageerrorsarenumerous.Problemswithcorrectuseoftense,diction,wordorder,sentencestructure,andsubject-verbagreementalsointerferewithmeaning.Hadthewriternotincludedreferencestoteachershelpingstudentsknowwhattostudy,theessaywouldprobablyhavereceivedascoreof1insteadofa2. 感谢您阅读《历年GRE考试Issue主题范文及评析29 》一文,出国留学网(liuxue86.com)编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。

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